I read the story out to Tayfun and Sener and they both thought it was really good and well written. I really enjoyed the build up of tension as Alfie discovers what has happened to him. Sad but somehow comforting to know that Alfie is happy in his own company.
A successful short story with an interesting twist at the end. I’m sure that older children (9/10 year olds) would love it.
I really enjoyed this, its daring and I enjoyed the build up, even though you can guess whats happened you still want to read on, also thought the part about the sweets tasting bad was brilliant!
Wow Tufty. Really enjoyed it. What a sad little story. I really had no idea what would happen. Poor little thing, like alex I’m left really thoughtful. Love the art work. Poor alfie. X
I read the story out to Tayfun and Sener and they both thought it was really good and well written. I really enjoyed the build up of tension as Alfie discovers what has happened to him. Sad but somehow comforting to know that Alfie is happy in his own company.
A successful short story with an interesting twist at the end. I’m sure that older children (9/10 year olds) would love it.
I really enjoyed this, its daring and I enjoyed the build up, even though you can guess whats happened you still want to read on, also thought the part about the sweets tasting bad was brilliant!
High five from me! x
Thanks!!!
Well done Tuft.
I’ve finally got round to reading this and am really impressed.
I’m a very fickle reader, and stop as soon as something bores me. But I definately didnt stop reading this story. Good job buddy.
Sx
Very good tuff, it left me wanting more – did his mum kill him? Will he be stuck in limbo forever etc etc
Hey Al,
I’m afraid its one of those annoying ambiguous endings. I have some answers in my mind but I thought it would be nice to let the reader decide!
Tuf x
Very good story Tuffers, kept me interested all the way. Waiting for your next one with eager anticipation
Wow Tufty. Really enjoyed it. What a sad little story. I really had no idea what would happen. Poor little thing, like alex I’m left really thoughtful. Love the art work. Poor alfie. X
Glad you liked it! X